Formal critique of the book "Born Of Fire" written by Irmelin Shively, critic by Cynthia Sherman

The Current Title - How catchy is it? How well does it convey the information in the manuscript?


Born Of Fire
by Irmelin Shively

This title is catchy, and it conveys the information in the manuscript. This is a terrific title, and it will draw your potential readers in. I am impressed with this choice for a title.

The Current Length of the Work - Is it appropriate for the target market?
The current length of this work is around 200 pages. The target market is for middle class America I agree with this target market. I do feel that this will have mass appeal.

Dialogue (if any) - Describe and comment.
The dialogue is easy to understand and follow. The readers will appreciate the ease with which this may be read. Nice work.

As I think you already quite well understand (from what I’ve seen in your manuscript),
Always keep in mind that dialogue is an excellent way to convey character. The more you can “show” someone through dialogue (both external and internal), gestures and action, the less you have to “tell” your reader (i. e., narration). “Telling” doesn’t directly involve your reader; “showing” does. And to write a successful story, you have to involve your reader! Nice work.

Your grammar, spelling and punctuation are all quite satisfactory. Congratulations! When your mechanics are solid and you know how to tell an interesting story, you’re halfway home. The rest is just marketing – and patience!

Is there a need for illustrations? (Children’s, non-fiction, etc.)
I feel that illustrations are not needed for this adult fiction manuscript. The text provides a clear image of characters, settings, and events. Nice work.

The imagery is fantastic.

If illustrations are used, they will enhance the meaning and enjoyment that this story has to offer. I was not able to view the illustrations. I wish I was able to.

Conclusion
This manuscript is amazing. Not only is the idea a good one; many readers will be able to relate to this material, and I’m convinced that you can turn this into a marketable book. It has all of the necessary elements: good characterization; interesting (and well-described) settings and action; authentic-sounding dialogue.

Many, many readers will benefit from reading this material, and they will thank you for sharing your experience. I am impressed with your knowledge, writing skills, and storytelling ability. This material will be a great success, and I sincerely wish you luck with this endeavor. However you will not need luck, as you have a fantastic and important story to share.
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